Invincible
by Alana Albertson
Publication Date: March 9, 2014
Genres: Contemporary, Romance,Suspense, Young Adult
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I’ll be honest with you—I’m no hero. Sure, the media tries
to brand every Navy SEAL as some kind of Batman dressed in cam-mies. There’s
even a line in one of our cadences: Superman is the man of steel, he ain’t no
match for Navy SEAL. You’ve seen the movies—we’re infallible, invaluable,
invincible. But that night, the one you read about in the papers … all I really
wanted to do was get laid.
One harmless fuck with a Aruban whore, no strings attached.
I picked her out of a lineup—wild, dark hair, long legs and a crook-ed smile.
After she sucked me off, I relaxed back onto the creaky, cum-stained cot,
thankful for the blissful moments she gave me when I actually forgot for a
second the faces of my buddies who died because I made the wrong call, the
tears of the children I couldn’t save, and the eyes of the enemies I
slaughtered during their last seconds of life.
But before I left, her hazel eyes peered into my soul. She
whispered in a distinct Californian accent, “My name is Annie Hamilton. I’m an
American citizen. I was kidnapped on spring break five years ago. You’re my
last hope. Please save me.”
One desperate plea. This wasn’t a Hollywood blockbuster or a
New York Times best-selling thriller. I knew this time there was no room for
excuses, no margin for errors. I had one chance to put on the cape and be her
hero.
Each pump, each thrust, each moan, made my skin crawl. His rum-spiked breath blew hot
on my neck. Finally he collapsed on top of me, and I didn’t even have the strength to push him
off. After a few torturous minutes, he rolled off me, threw the money on the floor and walked out
of the room.
This was my life. How many more men could I take? Once my pimp decided he no
longer had use for me, I would be history. He would trade me to another brothel, another island.
Or kill me.
~ UPDATE! ~
What a difference a re-write made for this one!
The book has a much better flow. Both Annie and Patrick’s POV’s,
some great new sub plots and a mostly slower pace making big
necessary changes. PHEW!
~~~
For me, it could still have been a little more intense
and a little slower at times.
The brothel scene at the beginning is a critical one; I’d have happily read another dozen pages on that alone. Taking that whole scene slowly and giving it a more all consuming intensity was (I felt) essential. This was the blowjob that was going to save her life, it would have been an incredibly desperate scene but I thought that it just missed the mark on that.
Toward the end I think it could have been comfortably
given some more pages too.
Overall though, it’s a winner!
Moving up from 3.5 to 4 stars.
Thanks very much Alana for giving me the opportunity to re-read.
Thanks very much Alana for giving me the opportunity to re-read.
ORIGINAL REVIEW..
From the beautiful cover to the incredible synopsis
I was positive that this would be a winner!
I'd have given anything for it to have been a 6 star read.
I've never known such potential in a story,
it screamed 'movie'.
Sadly though, for me it was paced at such breakneck speed toward the end that it felt out of sorts.
Why the sudden need to change everything
that was said throughout the story?
It could have been amazing.
But from a strong start it unfortunately finished weak.
I'm truly gutted.
**UPDATE**
Alana is rewriting Invincible!!
I want her wish her the best of luck
and assure her that we're right here for the reread.
Alana Albertson is the former President of both Romance Writers of Americas’s Young Adult and Chick Lit chapters and the founder of Academe Advantage, a college admissions & test preparation company. Alana Albertson holds a Masters of Education from Harvard University and a Bachelor of Arts in English from Stanford University. A recovering professional ballroom dancer, Alana currently writes contemporary romance and young adult fiction. She lives in San Diego, California, with her husband, two young sons, and four dogs. When she’s not spending her time needlepointing, dancing, or saving dogs from high kill shelters through Pugs N Roses, the rescue she founded, she can be found watching episodes of House Hunters, Homeland, or Dallas Cowboys Cheerleaders: Making the Team.
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